looking good so far, keep at it :3
i use to be a song writer but found it very hard after awhile so i gave up on writing and just stuck to singing instead
You could do what I do with some of my songs, so like you've used "I promised" as the recurrant in the first verse, you could change it on the second verse to "You promised" or "I lied" or.. you know? Mix it up a bit. ^_^
Wow...You wouldn't lie?? Is this supposed to be a love song? Because it sure doesn't sound like one...Or maybe its just me. A lot of times it's just me. Whatever though. Nice...Besides that this person you're singing to...I feel bad for. Haha. Hope it's not me. Haha. That wasn't funny
thats an interesting song i like it although its not finished id like to congratulate you on it i think that you should continue with it to tell you the truth i already have 15 songs written its fun writing songs so keep it up