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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 4:23 pm
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| Is this the right forum? XD
Probably not, although if it is- yeah!
Wow, I feel rather stupid.
Anywho...
Hello, I'm Xia!
At the moment I am attempting (yes, attempting) to write a story.
I would love a rate out of 10 and critiques :D
So, here is the beginning of my story (I haven't done much, haha):
A stream of light shone eerily through the window, piercing down blissfully as if sent from the heavens above. It was the only noticeable light source in the room, and also the only thing unadulterated inside the chamber. Something else in this besmirched room had once been proper. It had once been apt and angelic.
Had once been… this meaning it was no longer so.
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Uh, that's it for the moment D:
Rate? c: [/center]
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I like unicorns... and rainbows, and glasses, and sunshine... and lollipops, and purple, and Dumbledore... and blue, and carpets, and writing... and socks, and milo, and bracelets, and blankets... and orange, and oranges, and orange elephants... and towels. Did I mention that I like unicorns?
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Mingxia
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 10:08 pm
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Hehe, thankayou c:
Although, I do get where you were going with the use of words :3
You'd like to read more?
Uh... I write pretty slowly.
Okay, I mean, I basically write a sentence in two days because I'm a perfectionist XD
Once again, thank you so much for your rate
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I like unicorns... and rainbows, and glasses, and sunshine... and lollipops, and purple, and Dumbledore... and blue, and carpets, and writing... and socks, and milo, and bracelets, and blankets... and orange, and oranges, and orange elephants... and towels. Did I mention that I like unicorns?
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Mingxia
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 10:19 pm
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| I shall, aha, but it'll probably be roughly the same size of this. XD
I may even scrap this and start something else entirely.
I wrote something ages ago that's really long, or at least compared to most of my writing xP
If you want to read that, just mail me c:
I don't think that I'll post it because I didn't like it much.
/Shrugs
Can I pwetty pwease read your story; I promise I wont be mean or anything!
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PLLLEAASSEEE? :3
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I like unicorns... and rainbows, and glasses, and sunshine... and lollipops, and purple, and Dumbledore... and blue, and carpets, and writing... and socks, and milo, and bracelets, and blankets... and orange, and oranges, and orange elephants... and towels. Did I mention that I like unicorns?
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Mingxia
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 10:29 pm
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| Hmm, I'm not sure either.
I wouldn't know being new c:
/I'm such an experienced player, no? :3
Anywho, you could try to kind of 'conceal' the worse parts. Basically not going into too much detail, just to keep it PG13 XD
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I like unicorns... and rainbows, and glasses, and sunshine... and lollipops, and purple, and Dumbledore... and blue, and carpets, and writing... and socks, and milo, and bracelets, and blankets... and orange, and oranges, and orange elephants... and towels. Did I mention that I like unicorns?
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Mingxia
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 10:47 pm
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| XD
Hahah, okay c:
Wait, so where you are, what time is it again? :3
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I like unicorns... and rainbows, and glasses, and sunshine... and lollipops, and purple, and Dumbledore... and blue, and carpets, and writing... and socks, and milo, and bracelets, and blankets... and orange, and oranges, and orange elephants... and towels. Did I mention that I like unicorns?
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Mingxia
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Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2011 11:29 pm
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| One time I had dinner at 3- in the morning XD
PIZZA TASTES BETTER THEN. c:
Hehe.
GO HAVE DINNER; I command you :D
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I like unicorns... and rainbows, and glasses, and sunshine... and lollipops, and purple, and Dumbledore... and blue, and carpets, and writing... and socks, and milo, and bracelets, and blankets... and orange, and oranges, and orange elephants... and towels. Did I mention that I like unicorns?
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