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lexi luthor
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 PostPosted: Mon Dec 13, 2010 12:10 pm Reply with quote        
So, I took off from school today because Im really tired. Well, now I am really bored and want to write a poem off the top of my head. So.. here it goes

My Adoption Promise

Im not of your flesh,
nor bone of your bone,
but still miraculously I am your own;
I'll never forget for a minute,
that I didn't grow under your heart
but in it.

I love you Mommy!

so.. yup. Now you all know that I am adopted =]

Any critisim, hit me hard if need be, I'll take both pushy and light.

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 PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2011 2:43 pm Reply with quote        
Seriously, really beautiful! I can not say I can relate, but I have always thought that it is not necessary that one should have biological
parents to feel exactly the same belonging and love. Now, I might be just stating the obvious, but this type of family always gives me the impression of being so much stronger and more interesting than most Smile And that is what i think your poem is reflecting as well!
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 PostPosted: Tue May 24, 2011 7:49 am Reply with quote        
aww ^^ that is so lovely!

the only critique I have is the word "miraculously" - it doesn't feel like it fits, to me, it seems to make that line too long. But hey, thats just me Smile

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 PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2011 5:44 pm Reply with quote        
I love it! I am adopted as well. I was adopted by my grandparents. Smile
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 PostPosted: Mon Jun 13, 2011 7:42 pm Reply with quote        
Yaaay, another adopted person =]

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